In the last century, the earth's temperature has been concerning. Over the last 100 years, the average global temperaturehas been risen 0,6 degrees C around the world because people activities. These days, many industrial factories are created and there are more people using the cars which use fossil fuels such as coal and petroleum, this is largely to blame for the increase in carbon dioxide. On top of that, the greenhouse effect is the key factor which cause global warming. Greenhouse gases are almost transparent to solar radiation but strongly absorb and emit infrared radiation. It trap heat within the surface-troposphere system.
About 1 year ago, I read a newspaper which suggested that Greenland's ice sheet will begin to melt if the temperature there rises by 3 degrees C. That is something many scientists think is linkely to happen in another 100 years. And the oceans would rise if it happened. There wuold be many low-lying islands and populated areas include the places for animal which would be destroyed. That is the huge problem which facing would nature
So what should we do ? We are still students which people can't do huge senses. But we can do something which would be bigger if we did it together. For example, I think we should all recycle the paper which was made by wood. You know that the forests were destroyed all day to use for people's requirements. On the other hand, the Government should pay for company which build the factories to make clear energy.... If we did that, we would stop a little bit of the problem.
Hi Chuong,
ReplyDeleteAnother great post! Fascinating to read and based on a really good choice of video. (Did you know it is the same one that Qian used??).
Your summary of the first part of the video is excellent with all the key points mentioned. maybe you could also have summarised the rest of the video. For instance, the things they said about how by the end of the next century the earth's temperature will rise by 2-10% and that this will affect weather patterns.
Also, you didn't include any direct quotes. Things like this:
The video highlights that 'it is human activity that is driving the temperatures up'.
Your use of another newspaper article is excellent and again you did a very good job of summarising it and then giving your own opinions. That is exactly what we are looking for, so well done!
As usual, you used a lot of great language here, including many things we have been studying in class. In particular, great linking and an excellent use of the second conditional in the final paragraph when you give your solutions. A few things to check, however:
- 'the earth'S temperature has been CONCERNING'
- 'Over the last 100 years, THE average global TEMPERATURE HAS RISEN 0,6 degrees C around the world because OF people'S activities'.
- 'factorIES'
- 'there are more people usING carS which use fossil fuels such as coal and petroleum. THIS IS largely to blame for the increase in carbon dioxide' ('this' means the situation you described before about the factories and cars. It is very useful to use in the next sentence like this).
- 'the key factor WHICH CAUSES global warming'.
- 'That is something many scientists think is LIKELY to happen in another' (in another what?? 50 years? 100 years?)
- 'There WOULD be many low-lying islands and populated areas includING the places for animalS, WHICH WOULD BE destroyed'.
- 'That is the huge problem which carry world nature' (CARRY?? what do you mean? Do you mean the huge problem FACING WORLD NATURE?)
- 'We are still studentS'
- 'people'S requirementS' (again use 's' when it's more than one!)
- 'ON the other hand,
Lovely post Chuong. Keep up the good work...and stay healthy!
rui